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    dots Submission Name: VACATION SURVIVAL (PART THREE)dots
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    Author: dycrain
    ASL Info:    56/F/U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    7.33 - 51/54/19
    Words: 274
    Class/Type: Story/Comedy
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    Description:
       Chapter three of a four chapter short story, done in free verse.
    I hope you are all finding the humor in this disasterous vacation.
    I did learn to water ski, after several attempts and battles with the skis.
    I had earned this right to learn, as before we left home, I had to swim in an olympic size pool, up and back at least once. This was quite a challenge in itself, as I had a terrible fear of the water, due to a childhood accident.
    As, in a true story, circumstances cannot be changed, I am looking for your thoughts.
    God bless,
    Yvonne


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    dotsVACATION SURVIVAL (PART THREE)dots
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    Next morning, after a pain-filled sleep
    I awoke and took a look.
    Hand and arm so swollen
    rings left on would not even move.

    But, off we went to Rathbun Lake
    water skiing, I wanted to learn.
    Into the water, with skis close at hand
    how to place skis on feet, instruction is now given.

    Attempt after attempt, I would not give up
    legs and skis flopping to and fro, out of control.
    I bet those watching had a great laugh
    what you think looks easy, is not that way at all.

    In the lake I sat, ready at last
    pigeon-toed, feet close together.
    Boat started, must pull back on the rope
    an absolute necessity, to be breast high.

    Onward, the boat charged
    giving me the needed speed.
    On the skis, I did NOT stand
    instead in a squat I stayed.

    "I gave it an outstanding try"
    I said, with a sigh.
    One quarter of a mile
    was I, in that squat.

    Laughing so hard at this sight
    he could not believe his eyes.
    In this attempt to water ski
    I received a Rathbun Lake douche.

    Now, Dick's turn to ski
    had done this many times before.
    With confidence, into the water he went
    leaving ME in conrol of the wheel.

    No experience at piloting a boat
    into a double wake, he I took.
    Upside down, sent him tumbling
    several times, head-over-heels.

    Now, had I done enough damage?
    Smile was gone, a broken leg had he,
    Swollen black and blue, and now
    in desperate need of a keg, was he.

    TO BE CONTINUED




    Submitted on 2005-11-17 06:24:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, at least you werent the only one to suffer! best done with your best friend! i know i always feel better if my husband suffers with me! did you go home now? or are the two of you too stubborn to call it quits? guess i'll have to read and find out!~~tracy
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by tmullins | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG! Does that mean you both came back from your hols with a broken leg?! I guess that just leaves the dog then! At least you can laugh about it now. If you were unable to laugh about it, you would probably cry for a long time and maybe need therapy for years lol.

    I would love to see the above in rhyme instead of freestyle...but that's just personal preference ;-) Cya Mel.
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by litllost | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha! This is the most awful vacation I have heard about in a long time. haha! I found this quite amusing and the thought of you waterskiing in a squat for all that distance made me laugh. I got quite a kick out of the douche comment hee hee ohhh god that sucks! Now Dick has a broken leg? Geez you guys were out to kill yourselves hahaahahaaaa! Reading this just put a smile on my face this morning and for that I thank you. This is most entertaining despite that I feel bad that this vacation sounds like a nightmare. I shall await the next part, cant imagine what else could possibly happen. You guys must tell this story to people and laugh when you think about this vacation. I am sure it wasnt too funny at the time, but now it must be hilarious. Thanks for sharing. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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