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    dots Submission Name: If I painted Youdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 697
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 437



    Description:
       This is about my friend...Solomon disease...I read his poetry and it is soo beautiful. He has such a pretty soul and I would love to paint it.



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    dotsIf I painted Youdots
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    If I painted you it would look like love
    a soft picture
    with varying shades of red
    flowing like the tide, but not angry
    fulll like a child, no more hunger

    If I painted your soul
    it would be romantic
    and sensitive
    and full of you
    and beautiful
    and undefined and mixed together
    of emotions and tears and passion
    you are truly a work of art




    Submitted on 2005-11-17 09:40:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was great Jaz! This is beautiful and it describes how I feel towards you. The whole time I read this...I thought of you and say...a few other people...but you stand out the most. You are a great person...just like this was a great write! I'm sorry I can't really write more about this but my mind just went blank. Code blank. Damn...
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hows things havent seen your posts much i have posted 5 or 6 but have deleted
    this was a great write ecspecially when you write about someones spirit you should be proud of yourself and so should the person you wrote it for
    very nice and well done
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      this was incredible. it reminds me of my featured piece. except its about love and mine was about..something that wasnt lovely. this is really really good.
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This was incredible. I could see a wave of color splashing off a canvas and flowing out to tell the world of the soul it represents. This is lovely...I sincerely admire this piece of work.
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by beldolore | [ Reply to This ]


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