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    dots Submission Name: ~`~My paper Doll~`~dots
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    Author: _Dancing_Alone_
    ASL Info:    14/f/and...MARS.
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 91/96/36
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 286
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    Description:
       i wrote this to go along with a picture i drew.its sort of like Sally (Nightmare Before Christmas) as a child.


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    dots~`~My paper Doll~`~dots
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    she's scarred from inside
    she sleeps with opened eyes
    stiched all over.nobody loves her
    made from scratch.happiness she lacks
    her soul hollowed out.she's my paper doll.

    My raggety aun listens to my problems
    gives me solutions, then shuts herself again.
    empty heart.all gray & dark.
    nobody loves her but,i cant part from her.
    im the nobody that loves her.
    im the one who feels her pain
    & im the one whos there (4 her)

    i want you to imagine,this broken girl.
    feel her pain,see her world.
    her stiched up wounds.

    no emotions left.just all alone to die.
    left there all alone,to hear me cry
    the pain of hollow movement
    of nowhere left to go.

    the hurt of a sorrow filled soul.
    she is my paper doll.




    Submitted on 2005-11-17 15:14:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree, it is very sad and had a lot of emotion in it. There were also many powerful lines.
    I think out of all the lines, my favorites were; "I want you to imagine, this broken girl. Feel her pain, see her world. Her stiched up wounds." After I read that, I felt like crying. It reminded me of a lot of people I know.
    Since I've never seen a poem like this before on this site, or anywhere else for that matter, I think this is pretty original. Good job....

    ~Piper
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a sad poem - that's how it made me feel. A genuinely sad poem. You express the emotion so well - especially in these lines

    'My raggety aun listens to my problems
    gives me solutions, then shuts herself again.
    empty heart.all gray & dark.'

    I hope you pay attention to your spellings, spacing, punctuation though, it would make it even better. :)
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by girlunfettered | [ Reply to This ]



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