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Author: crazygothchika
ASL Info:    15/f/oh
Elite Ratio:    2.36 - 21 /36 /9
Words: 178
Class/Type: Poetry /Cutting or Mutilation
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Go into the bathroom
and lock the door
sit there sobbing
upon the bloody floor.

Head screaming
body starts shaking
calmness and control
begins breaking.

Nothing will help
oh wait there is one thing
there is no return
once that those urge's begin.

Crawl to the cupboard
begin the raid
take ot the weapon
the shining silver blade.

Place it on my wrist
with the angle just right
drag it across with out a care
hand clenched tight.

Perfect slices
remove the blade
at first there is nothing
then I watch the dark shade.

The blood is endless
thick and dark
it falls in the sink
a vivid red mark.

The pressure is released
the tears have gone
now only the outside
remains torn.

Then it's all over
with an odd feeling of calm
I hide the cutts
to avoid raising alarm.

That's enough for now
I feel almost fine
away goes the blade
untill the next time!




Submitted on 2005-11-17 15:15:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow, this is good as well. you have some talent. you really expressed how cutting is an addiction...sort of...

i liked how the images i got...when you described the red blood in the sink. awesome. great work.

-Nathan
| Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
  OMG, i loved it. I understand the feelsing and the emotion that you portray in this poem, as i too have cut my wrist, a few years back.
Anyways kepp smiling
Love Becca
| Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by Wingless Fairy | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! i loved your write a lot! the flow was great and it was rilli well written. i used to cut so i can relate one of my frends do also so yes. cant wait to read more!
| Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Christina69 | [ Reply to This ]


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