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Dance-


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 63
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Description:


TOGETHA FOREVER AND NEVER APART I LOVE YOU MY BOI WITH ALL OF MY HEART!!!!!!!!!!


Dance-



Take my hand into yours,
Let's go for a walk,
Just you and me,
Take a spot on the floor-
Then take me in your arms,
We'll dance together-
Rock your head,
to the beat of my heart
as we dance this dance
and sing this song of love
and as time ticks on,
Life seems forever
Now that we are together-




Submitted on 2005-11-17 15:30:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like the line "we'll dance together" its so simple and straight forward and i rell enjoyed it. short and sweet and really effective darls. nice work.

xx
Chanyn
| Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Shark06 | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! I really liked this poem! One of your best works so far i'll say! I liked the ending:"Life seems forever, now thatwe are together. It touched me somehow, kinda how i feel at the moment with my relationship. Keep up the good work!

_shax_ :)
| Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by _Shax_ | [ Reply to This ]


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