writing is a talent.everyone can express=u do both. this write is poetic in a way,and is thought provocking as stated above,but it is more of a rant and personal thoughts=this is not a bad thing=i only say for creative purposes.
i also agree that u are experencing more feelings about this situation that u say=maybe bitterness or jeolously=this is truly an opinion like above and thats were the write is really good=ur leaving the reader to his or her own interpation=cool
horrible spot. i was there a couple weeks ago. i let go. just need to see some people who are ACTUALLY in love, and he will get it. as for your poem, it was pretty good. this is a pretty personal piece, so i dont wanna propose any changes that would make you unhappy with it, so ill keep my mouth shut. good job, and i hope the best of luck for you.
i get what this is about, since one or two of my freinds are the same. myself, i changed for the better, but some peole recon i changed my boyfriend for the worst. i think that this poem is a true written piece, and i cant help but feel as if you werer perhaps a little mad with your freind. just my interpretation, so feel free to discard it. any way, i really hope your friend gets through, and my advise is be honest with them, but not blunt.
This is so true People need to change in life to move forward to a more loving life To not change keeps us trapt in our current state of being This can only lead to pain A very thought provoking write Great Job Ron
have i told you that you have talent.. yeah you have and i agree with you in the message of this writing .. i think ron expressed better than me : "People need to change in life to move forward to a more loving life" so ... if you have time please check out my writings. .. peace and love! and take care! Victor