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    dots Submission Name: Fallingdots

    Author: frozenconscienc
    ASL Info:    17/f/md
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 91/55/13
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       My friend is dating a person who has changed dramatically, and for the worse. He can't let her go, because he fears change. So yeah.

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    I watched it crash
    Couldn't help but smile
    They say you can't fight the inevitable
    Oh how stupid it is
    When you do this to yourself

    "Looks like it's dying"
    I could tell you over again
    But turn a cheek and keep on
    Soon it would fall down
    Knowing you're on the wrong road

    I watched it burn
    Couldn't help but grin
    They say that people change
    Oh how I pity it
    You did this to yourself

    How could you look to your left
    And see the same person
    We both know it's wrong
    Why do people fear change
    And follow the same wrong road

    I watched a fire burn out
    Can't say you didn't see it coming
    People may come and people may go
    But times won't ever change my friend
    When you do this to yourself

    Submitted on 2005-11-17 18:02:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      TRUEEEEE. -poketh- Yes. Thank you for posting this.

    It's so trueeeeeeeeeeeeee waaaaaaaaah.

    Damn him. -eye twitch-

    Good poem, btw. I <3 it. :D
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Kumori | [ Reply to This ]
      writing is a talent.everyone can express=u do both.
    this write is poetic in a way,and is thought provocking as stated above,but it is more of a rant and personal thoughts=this is not a bad thing=i only say for creative purposes.

    i also agree that u are experencing more feelings about this situation that u say=maybe bitterness or jeolously=this is truly an opinion like above and thats were the write is really good=ur leaving the reader to his or her own interpation=cool

    keep writing a pleasure to read

    all one persons opinion=one of many

    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      horrible spot. i was there a couple weeks ago. i let go. just need to see some people who are ACTUALLY in love, and he will get it. as for your poem, it was pretty good. this is a pretty personal piece, so i dont wanna propose any changes that would make you unhappy with it, so ill keep my mouth shut. good job, and i hope the best of luck for you.
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
      i get what this is about, since one or two of my freinds are the same. myself, i changed for the better, but some peole recon i changed my boyfriend for the worst.
    i think that this poem is a true written piece, and i cant help but feel as if you werer perhaps a little mad with your freind.
    just my interpretation, so feel free to discard it. any way, i really hope your friend gets through, and my advise is be honest with them, but not blunt.
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so true
    People need to change in life to move forward to a more loving life
    To not change keeps us trapt in our current state of being
    This can only lead to pain
    A very thought provoking write
    Great Job
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      have i told you that you have talent.. yeah you have and i agree with you in the message of this writing .. i think ron expressed better than me :
    "People need to change in life to move forward to a more loving life"
    so ... if you have time please check out my writings. ..
    peace and love!
    and take care!
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]

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