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    dots Submission Name: New World Orderdots
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    Author: Twila
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Unplottable :)
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 66/37/5
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 1153
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 555



    Description:
       Think the second Crusades...


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    dotsNew World Orderdots
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    It is time to take a stand
    And create a New World Order.
    If you come help me
    I will give you a quarter.

    We are reconstructing humans,
    From pieces left behind.
    I am reconstructing humans
    From an all too human mind.

    This is no obligation
    Or mission you must heed.
    For in our creation
    It is our common need.

    As you contemplate desire
    I will find a quarter.
    Thank you for joining in the
    Creation of a New World Order.




    Submitted on 2005-11-17 19:12:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is probably my favorite poem ive read in the sea of crap floating on this site loved it from beginning to end hope to read more by u soon keep up what ever it is you do youre good at it

    cartoon autopsy
    this is a fav now for sure
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by cartoon autopsy | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this because "IT" can be seen differently. At first read I felt that the .25 was a sarcastic metaphor for religion - that you must pay - and at second read I found myself thinking that "IT" doesn't cost anything & the quarter represents that, in a way, too.
    Our world needs love and positive energy & we all share that here creating that very thing and reflecting "IT".
    Bravo!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-02-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      ok, the only picture i have in my head right now is of a 25 cent hooker...

    hey, time to repopulate the world, i'll give you a quarter if you drop your pants...

    i'm at a loss as to how this poem relates to the Crusades.

    poetically it was pretty well written.

    lol, but other than that i'm kinda lost
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      It is really excellent poem with good rhyme; there is a wonderful hyperbole in "We are reconstructing humans". In your description you wrote "Think the second Crusades" which was on of the most failure Crusades, so I understand nothing about the symbol in your poem but I am sure that it will be wonderful.
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Duke Medhat | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice little poem. I wonder what the motivation was behind this piece? Perhaps the dismal existance of our world now? I am not really sure how to interpret this poem but I can say that our world needs some serious fixing. The way things are going, at least here in the United States, it is disheartening. All the war and our soldiers dying everyday, will it ever end? And the sad part is, even if this damn war ends, there will be another and another, there always is. Anyway, if you got peace on your mind and a kinder society to create, I am with ya! And I'll give you the quarter! haha! Very nice poem. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Lol its kind of random. I used to write very random things but it looks like it could have a really strong impacting meaning if someone was to go and decipher it themself. Remember someone told me always write with a meaning, and if no meaning comes make one.
    | Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by winterdove | [ Reply to This ]
      OK I'm ready! Need someone to campain for you?
    I do not know what you were thinking when you wrote this? But all in all it was pretty good.
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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