I love the image it produces, and how it personifies the pine trees. The last line seems to not fit, at least 'covers' doesn't seem to. I would suggest changing it to 'cover', or something like that. I think it's just an agreement issue. -HaldirLives
Beautiful as usual Cheryl. This has a chill tone to it that is fitting for winter,-it speaks of that season without actually using and "winter" words. I have only one small suggestion and that is in the the last line to drop the s from "covers", ( to agree with the plural subject "pine needles" ) I loved the image of the pine needles as tears. The poem stirs the senses of sight. sound, feeling and smell, -the cool moist freshness of the winter woods or forest. Sally
This lovely haiku speaks to me of human nature, as well as mother nature. The bitter winter winds blowing pine needles to the cold ground.. reflects also, the human heart when it's depressed. You did a great job with this one.. and it's good to have you back. ~Sandra
hey, the Queen of haiku is back! welcome back! i like this, i can feel the chill and love the image of the pine needles falling like tears.. a nice little winter package all wrapped up like only you can do!
Hooray for the Haiku! I really am glad, like everyone, that you are sharing your wonderful words again!
This seems as though "IT's" a nature poem in human ways also - perhaps you are part of that wind and the tears are welcome ~ wonderful haiku Cheryl! God Bless! Tell us how you are! Love,Peace,Joy! tif
Who the hell wrote this? *looks around* Hmmm... Could it be the Queen of Haikus (bless u)?
*looks again*
Dang, it is, HA!
Hey! Nice, one. Never let the winds blow you down, I agree! Ever notice how sometimes those pine needles build up and somehow create a soothing mattress as the winters go by? I just did after reading this. Thanks Cheryl!
Submission Name: winds move unyielding `Haiku`
