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Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 54
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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hmmmmmmm idk i just wrote it tell me what you think. Should i add on to it?


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True thugs neva die
This is true it ain't no lie
I've grown up learing life is tough
and to kick his ass when he gets rough
Except for when it's in the bed
though i'd neva give him head
he's gonna always be there.. maybe
true thugs neva die...like my baby




Submitted on 2005-11-17 20:47:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is good as is. u spelled "learning" wrong. if u did add on to it make sure not to ruin an already amazin write. the never giving head line kinda through me off though. peace babe
| Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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