Dearest Suicide Dreamer by Poechick13

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Submission Name: Dearest Suicide Dreamer dots

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Author:	Poechick13
ASL Info:	16/f/IN
Elite Ratio:	3.34 - 42/59/22
Words:	77

Class/Type:	Poetry/
Total Views:	227
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	486

Description:
One of my best friends (who I feel for as more than a friend) attempted suicide. I wrote this the night I found out. I found out after two weeks of his absence being unexplained. In this, I try and reflect what he did to himself to how I felt.

Dearest Suicide Dreamer dots

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I find I have an empty place -
You made along your wrist.
Or did it split my heart's space -
As pills danced across your lips?

I find this silent flow of tears -
Come unexpectedly.
Yet I've felt you and all your fears,
At other times we bleed.

I find I miss you more, my dear;
Though I'm but now aware,
For I'm tonight without you here,
You're cold, alone... unfair.

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i thought it was a great write..

I find I have an empty place -
You made along your wrist.
Or did it split my heart's space -
As pills danced across your lips?

i liked the way that sounded..and the way you wrote it was good
| Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by Yella_Bone05 | [ Reply to This ]
Hehe, never seen you around before (I don't pay attention anyway)

I didn't understand this very well. It made sense and then it threw me off. Especially the flow of the first...stanza. I feel nerdy for using actual poetry terms D: don't tell.
But it's like--you're talking about yourself and then someone else. or are you just talking about yourself.
...yea. I'm confused. in the dark whether this is a plain old angst poem, or something much more complicated than that.

Oh! Are you maybe, personifying an emotion?

;_; ...If I'm wrong, please don't hate me.

but thanks for sharing. nonetheless.<3
-Mi
| Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]

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