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    dots Submission Name: TO STAND TALLdots
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    Author: daniel05
    ASL Info:    16/male/LA
    Elite Ratio:    6.11 - 92/52/7
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 843
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    Bytes: 543



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       A little late night scribbling on the keyboard..............

    And after it was read 3 or 4 times, It now kinda has a little place as one of my faves.. But that's just me


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    dotsTO STAND TALLdots
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    Immovable pain
    Sanctified gain
    Is there such?

    Tremendous hurt
    Innocent flirt
    Is there such?

    To be locked in a cage
    Unlike a bird, you develop rage
    As the preacher and the therapist
    Slowly turns the page


    To find hope
    A little reason
    To not use rope
    A little justifiable treason

    Without warning, Without stall
    With no help, Just self-confidence
    To continue to live

    TO STAND TALL




    Submitted on 2005-11-18 01:39:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very nice poem. I like the message you have conveyed with your words. Life is full of surprises, not always good ones and the decisions we make effect our entire life. It would be easier to curl up in a ball and hide from the world but to take all the bumps and bruises in stride, learn from the experience, and remain strong is the way to go. We gain knowledge from our pain, and it only serves to make us stronger. Self confidence is something that propels us to be all we want to be and achieve what we want in life regardless of the difficult times. This is a very good poem. Well written and expressed. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is just fab! It reminds me of someone who is going through a really rough time and is having decisions made for them;

    To be locked in a cage
    Unlike a bird, you develop rage
    As the preacher and the therapist
    Slowly turns the page

    It seems to me that finally the person decides they can and will take charge of their life, their confidence grows by making this decision to steer their life in the direction THEY wish it to take and not the way others feel they should live.

    I love it, great write! Mel.
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by litllost | [ Reply to This ]


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