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    dots Submission Name: Substancedots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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    As the late Spring rains
    drain the vibrant
    new colors
    of rebirth...
    So as the blood of man
    can be drained
    and spread
    across lands...
    To in dormant and decaying
    state of rest
    the color of soul
    yet remains...
    Does a tree feel less
    of a tree
    when bare...
    Would a man be none
    of humanity
    with lifelessness...
    Will some argue a Faith
    to Love
    unseen, unfelt...
    But by the color Grace
    are seasons
    in virtue...
    For tis not presented
    then taken away
    in malice...
    Tis Love's blind lesson
    in vision enlightened
    and omnipotent...




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      alrighty, alturistic alturism, interesting. this isn't exactly something you get away with reading once and feel as though you understand it. i like that, making me think with motivational reason. I like your view that you present in this write.
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      This is nice, and uplifting. It flows well, and it makes me picture rainbows and a light spring rain, and lots of green....it's spiritual, and I appreciate the vision presented to me. I enjoyed this very much.
    | Posted on 2004-05-03 00:00:00 | by Wonder Passing | [ Reply to This ]
      This is nicely written, has a good flow, it reminds me of a character in a play I just finished reading, perhaps you know it, Julius Caesar, it reminds me of Brutus, his life is based on virtue. nice work
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      I'll have to agree with what Vicious said cos I can't think of anything to compare this to. Lol. It reads well and I like the lines "Would a man be noe of humanity with lifelessness." Nice work.
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem, yet very light and warm, is a great poem...I love that spirtual style, that these lines mostly spoke to me...It told me about a strong very strong and special way of expressing a new feeling that I have not felt before...As the late Spring rains drain the vibrant new colors
    of rebirth...So as the blood of man
    can be drained.and spread
    across lands...
    To in dormant and decaying.
    | Posted on 2004-04-26 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]


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