Temptation
|
|
Description:
Hey everyone, it's Paco again. Looking for thoughts on this, mostly connotation again and the format. The obvious motif, is it good?
Temptation
Temptation to kill the obsession to remove all the passion to destroy all desseption to kill the obsession Temptation to smoke away the pain to burn all the sane to reach out and die cut open and cry Temptation to burn up the school to not be his fool to run away and hide to destroy all I lied Temptation to lose all bad friends to bring forth my ends to reach out and die to run away and hide Temptation to kill the obsession to destroy my desseption to smoke away the pain to burn all the sane Temptation to run away from him to leave life to dim to reach into Death and let go of breath Temptation to reach out and die |
Submitted on 2005-11-18 10:04:08 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post
Comments
Very rhymie like. Liked the way you had the words similar. Basically you used synonoms to support the term temptation. I liked lots.| | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ] | I challenge you to write something happy, something involving ponies and bright eyed puppies. Make a peom or story with a happy ending (like the story with the tree should have ended with the kid being forablly turned into a tree!). Come on! You do it and i will, hell, i bet Amber would too. We'll all do it. | | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by Augustine | [ Reply to This ] | Oh hun, this is sad. Please dont give into the temptation.. Id miss you way too much. I love the style of this poem. Its great! Like I said though, dont be weak like me.. | Amber | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ] | |
81489