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5-minute poem #1

Author: Kalis
ASL Info:    17/female/U.S
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what ya think, thats all.

5-minute poem #1

In giving thanks
We bow are head
Thankful for all the food that’s spread
Out on the table for us to share
Everyone has their rightful chair
This is the first real meal
That has been good in our time to heal
So many are not with us
And their beds lay covered in dust
But it is for the children that
We continue leaving our past at the door mat
For this is Thanksgiving and they need
Happiness so that they can proceed
Into a better tomorrow
And not remain in sorrow

Submitted on 2005-11-18 10:18:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow girl, i liked it!, it reminds me that even the world is going to hell, we can leave our troubles at the door and still enjoy a wonderful thanksgiving dinner. with turkey and great food and family.
i luv ya grl
| Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by Tabbie Kat | [ Reply to This ]
  you wrote this in 5 minutes? is that what the title means? if so, very nice. I think the rhythm is off a bit but the message is so good...

| Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by Milo shanley | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a really nice and festive poem. It tells me to enjoy what I have now, still remembering the people that I have known and are gone.
I really love this poem and commend you for it.
| Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
  A good job
The theme of the poem is very much needed in todays society

Im glad that this time of the year has come again it is my favorite holiday
We all really need to give thanks for the very gift of life
Take Care
| Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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