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    dots Submission Name: She Whispersdots
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    Author: Catylyx
    ASL Info:    17/F/Sand Springs
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 7/15/7
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       poem i wrote a few months back....i had a lot of really hard times the past summer...this was my therapy. poems.


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    She Whispers


    She's crying into her arms
    Hiding the tears that pool beneath them.
    "I'm sorry." she whispers to the only one who listens...

    A friend was nearly lost to her
    And another she's losing,
    but she's losing her grip, and she can't save them too.
    "I'm sorry." she whispers to the only one who listens...

    She watches a loved one fall apart
    and is helpless at what to do.
    "I'm sorry." she whispers to the only one who listens...

    Her health is fading,
    and she can't take this pain anymore.
    She prays for strength she fears she's losing,
    as she presses the pill to her lips.
    "I'm sorry." she whispers to the only one who listens...

    She holds tight to a love she's terrified of losing.
    Without it she wouldn't survive.
    "Save me." she whispers to the only one who listens...

    Her past has come back
    but she refuses to remember.
    "I'm sorry." she whispers to the only one who listens...

    She's whispering and crying, and starting to bleed,
    But she whispers to the only one who sees,

    She whispers to God.




    Submitted on 2005-11-18 13:01:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. It has good rythmn. If she is taking a pill though, why is she bleeding? is it for rhyme? I think that the emotions in this poem are confusing. I am not sure what is going on.
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]
      The strength in this prose is very obvious and subtle at the same time. I like how you were able to repeat the line " "I'm sorry." she whispers to the only one who listens..." without making it sound redundant. Great poem, I hope to read more of your stuff soon. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by RumnMoxie | [ Reply to This ]


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