Description: The beginning to a kind of series.
Little emo kkid venting sort of deal I spose...
I don't really know
We'll see I suppose
I really don't know how this would pretain to my life at all.
It doesn't really.
Just comment on it please
I've Only Just Begun -------------------------------------------
Welcome
Arms wide open
I'm here standing
There you are hoping
Came too soon
Lost the race
Didn't know it would hurt
Getting slapped in the face
To wake up
Safe and sound
Warm beneath a blanket of obscurity
How did I know it would change
How did I know my life would rearrange
Tears to fall
On the floor I crawl
Trying to catch up
But wounded so deep
Feeling far too emo
Why can't I reach?
Your moving too fast
Quit moving away
Can't you see I'm crying?
Can't you see I'm dying?
Doesn't it matter anymore?
I'm so done,
I'll just walk out the door.
Leave you in peace..
Leave you out of reach.
Yea,
it's the same old song.
But no complaints!
Not when you knew all along
That we'd end up here!
Not when you had no fear!
I get it;
You're done,
But for me.
The race has only just begun.
Feeling emo lately? Oh well. It was beautiful. A true emo kid doesn't know they're emo, so I supose you arn't emo. Not that you're going to answer, but what's just begun? Only a common question. No worries, I don't expect an answer for anything.
interesting. you avtually alot of different emotions that fell into one catogory if you know what i mean. they way you wrote it was kind of choppy but thats what made it so interesting.
Feeling far too emo
that phrase jumped out at me which to me wasn't a good thing. it felt a bit awkward which is weird because your going for a emo rant i think. just something i caught personally. overall i thought this was well written and i wonder if by you saying the beginning of a series, i could read ones following this one. hope you got that. lovely.
In this write I saw a battle that a person was having with themselves Kind of like right vs wrong You worded it very well And put a lot of emotin into this write You are a very positive person so I have no doubt in my mind good will conquer evil Take Care Ron
I want back and read A Sisters Love And I see in some places your right the flow is off I dont really look at that when I write thou usually I try and make the theme the most powerful part of the write and you said that was the strong point thank you for that Dont get me wrong I agree with you that the flow is very important and I will be looking at that closer in my future writes Thank You for pointing this out to me God Bless Ron
Submission Name: I've Only Just Begun
