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    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 948
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       i havn't submitted in a while so if it sucks i apologize but yea please gimme some feedback


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    the skin is rough and scarred
    its nerves scream out in need
    but i wont
    i can't
    not again
    it helps for a moment
    but only for a moment
    and then it causes more pain
    not physical but emotional
    the physical makes it better
    but the emotional makes me waste away
    no will to live
    nothing worth living for
    so if you find me
    sleeping peacefully
    you'll find me six feet under
    that's the only place
    i'd be at peace




    Submitted on 2005-11-18 17:13:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well i think you could of had some more detail, and i'm always big on poems with rhyming but i think this poem great it expresses wat the writter is feeling and i feel i can relate to it,
    ++My Pain++
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by my pain | [ Reply to This ]


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