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    dots Submission Name: VACATION SURVIVAL(PART FOUR)dots
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    Author: dycrain
    ASL Info:    56/F/U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    7.33 - 51/54/19
    Words: 457
    Class/Type: Story/Comedy
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    Description:
       This is the last part of a four part short story. I hope you all found the same humor I found.
    This was written in free verse, your thoughts are greatly appreciated.
    God bless,
    Yvonne


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    dotsVACATION SURVIVAL(PART FOUR)dots
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    Time to say good-bye, thank you God, we have been blessed.
    Amazing we are alive, although ,completely, messed.
    A long drive laid ahead, sadness felt was my guess.
    Clearly, our bodies were tortured, our drive was in distress.

    Bodies broken, another pounding to come, was for sure.
    In painful acceptance, finally, homeward bound we were.
    Dick, needing rest, to take it easy I did vow.
    So, you think vacation disasters are over now?

    Terror about to come our way, as I took control.
    Face to face, sixteen wheeler, fright did take its toll.
    Found I had been driving on the wrong side of the road.
    Eyes wide, in terror, my hot body turned frigid
    cold.

    Drivers screaming profanity, I dare not repeat.
    One arm driving, not going so swift, I sunk in defeat.
    To top off this chaos, I managed to stall the car.
    "Please start", flooded motor,for sure this was in par.

    Awakened, commotion all about, yelled "What in God's name?"
    Car started, divided road; explained I was not to blame.
    Taking charge, his first observation was dire need of fuel.
    Motor overheating, for some reason would not stay cool.

    Traveler's checks, needed money to pay for auto parts.
    Signed right, compared left; signed scratch, took with sympathetic hearts.
    All the way home, merchants judgement, right arm was broken.
    Without a flinch, with no alarm, checks were taken.

    Painful, need to rest arm, for my pillow I searched around.
    Discovered, what else, pillow was not to be found.
    True to vacation, I must have left it behind.
    My desire was home, no big deal, I did find.

    Feared, home we would never make, longest two day drive.
    But, finally, home sweet home, at last we did arrive.
    To this day, a small lump on my arm; I find.
    A reminder, to each other let's be kind.

    In memory, forever, I will keep this on file.
    As I now look back with a great big smile.
    THE END
    IN MEMORY MAY YOU REST IN PEACE.




    (copyright)
    Yvonne Marie Crain
    September 24, 2005




    Submitted on 2005-11-18 18:25:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Haha! Wow the vacation from hell finally ended and a huge sigh of relief that you guys are still intact! WHEW! hahaha! This forth edition to this poem is a good one. Very nicely written and ties in nicely with the other three. Picks up where the last one ended and keeps the readers curiosity the whole time...well at least for me anyway. This was a most enjoyable series for me to read. You gave me lots of smiles with these. Very well done. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i am so glad it's over! you are lucky to be alive! i hear all the bad wreck stories from my husband even when i am talking to him on the phone i can hear them happen, it's awful! i even saw a few while i rode with him one summer. poor cows, all over the road. any ways, your story was definately thrilling, i couldnt wait for you to get home to laugh about it! i see even with the lump on your arm you can still type! keep it up!~~tracy
    | Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by tmullins | [ Reply to This ]


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