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    dots Submission Name: School Spiritdots
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    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 856
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1100



    Description:
       I renamed it. Umm... okay if you hate it I dont care, but please dont leave like a 2 page long comment on how, I dont know what Im talking about or how Bush is a god. Okay! thank you and have a nice day.


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    dotsSchool Spiritdots
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    Smoking is bad
    Drugs are good
    Drinkings relaxing
    But we never should

    Preps are annoying
    Jock are fun
    Except when they yell
    "we're number one"

    Benladin's my hero
    Homework suxs
    We love our country
    Where bombs mean good luck

    They say Im an American
    No worries it's a lie
    Yeah! Bush is president
    Hope your ready to die

    Teachers are mean
    Pimps are cool
    We've got prostitutes
    In our school

    I love my school
    I've never lied
    Cant wait for the bell
    So I can commit suicide

    I curse and steal
    It's the American way
    I go to my boyfriends house
    And stay all day

    Yeah go team
    may-b you'll win this time
    You'll be our future soldiers
    on the frontline

    In a couple days
    Maybe we'll have a world war
    Uh oh Bush is pregnant
    I guess the rubber tore.




    Submitted on 2005-11-19 06:43:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is great...and whatever [censored]-head thinks bush is a god needs their head examine...and then pounded repeatedly (creepy rite?*smiles*) This was a great poem...I Loved it...you had my laughing the whole time...wow I don't know how to explain it exactly it just all fit together perfectly for a great result. this is definatly a favorite:) great write...keep writing.
    peace
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Um wow i dont really know how to explain the feelings for this poem - i think it is probably on of the best that i have read so far... and it is true in the school form of it and it was amazing how you placed that into words - i loved the hole thing until the last two lines which i think kinda through off the hole rest of the poem - but other then that good write -

    Thirst_4_Serenity
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, reminds me of my school WMHS. i agree on all the points you made in the poem. bush being a dumbass thats gonna kill us and everything else. but how are trying to tie these into one another? im not sure but i liked it.
    -brandon
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Leon Kennedy | [ Reply to This ]
      well hey
    smoking isnt that bad were all gonna die some day
    and i wouldnt go so far as to say binladens my hero but america needs to shave its bush lol

    xoxo
    that girl
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is definately not the average poem, it's a very ironic poem, like the things that are bad, you say are good. The only thing is that it's unclear, at first you talk about school, and then government issues, are you just trying to tie these together, to speak on today's society, and maybe how corrupt it may be?
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]


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