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School Spirit

Author: Drea
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I renamed it. Umm... okay if you hate it I dont care, but please dont leave like a 2 page long comment on how, I dont know what Im talking about or how Bush is a god. Okay! thank you and have a nice day.

School Spirit

Smoking is bad
Drugs are good
Drinkings relaxing
But we never should

Preps are annoying
Jock are fun
Except when they yell
"we're number one"

Benladin's my hero
Homework suxs
We love our country
Where bombs mean good luck

They say Im an American
No worries it's a lie
Yeah! Bush is president
Hope your ready to die

Teachers are mean
Pimps are cool
We've got prostitutes
In our school

I love my school
I've never lied
Cant wait for the bell
So I can commit suicide

I curse and steal
It's the American way
I go to my boyfriends house
And stay all day

Yeah go team
may-b you'll win this time
You'll be our future soldiers
on the frontline

In a couple days
Maybe we'll have a world war
Uh oh Bush is pregnant
I guess the rubber tore.

Submitted on 2005-11-19 06:43:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is great...and whatever [censored]-head thinks bush is a god needs their head examine...and then pounded repeatedly (creepy rite?*smiles*) This was a great poem...I Loved had my laughing the whole I don't know how to explain it exactly it just all fit together perfectly for a great result. this is definatly a favorite:) great write...keep writing.
| Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  Um wow i dont really know how to explain the feelings for this poem - i think it is probably on of the best that i have read so far... and it is true in the school form of it and it was amazing how you placed that into words - i loved the hole thing until the last two lines which i think kinda through off the hole rest of the poem - but other then that good write -

| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, reminds me of my school WMHS. i agree on all the points you made in the poem. bush being a dumbass thats gonna kill us and everything else. but how are trying to tie these into one another? im not sure but i liked it.
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Leon Kennedy | [ Reply to This ]
  well hey
smoking isnt that bad were all gonna die some day
and i wouldnt go so far as to say binladens my hero but america needs to shave its bush lol

that girl
| Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, this is definately not the average poem, it's a very ironic poem, like the things that are bad, you say are good. The only thing is that it's unclear, at first you talk about school, and then government issues, are you just trying to tie these together, to speak on today's society, and maybe how corrupt it may be?
| Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]

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