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    dots Submission Name: Face In The Crowddots
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    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1357
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       This is a very old poem I've written..I still like it though


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    dotsFace In The Crowddots
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    She is just like me
    Ridiculed
    Perhaps for different reasons
    Commiting her own treason
    Imperfect, and ugly
    Just like me
    She wanted to be
    Just like the girls on TV
    So flawless
    So inhuman
    A goddess
    But all she'll ever be
    Is another face in the crowd
    Even if she screamed out loud
    No one would look back at her
    If you chose to walk away
    She would say that she was use to it
    And pretend not to give a shit
    But on her face reflects the scars
    Of past friendships
    Long given up on
    She was always waiting
    For something better
    To come and take her away
    Make every scar fade
    She wants so bad to stand out
    She's just a face in the crowd
    Behind her eyes gleams metal
    The scars have come to life
    She is on the news now
    No longer just a face
    I wish I could have helped her
    Made a difference somehow
    Now she's a statistic
    A face that no one knows




    Submitted on 2005-11-19 09:24:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey Steven, I really could relate to "a face in the crowd" kind of sad- makes me think of someone who searched for meaning and recognition in life - and never found it until they showed up dead in the news.. tragic- but unfortunately happens all the time.. makes me want to wrap my arms around her if I could. Bonnie
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by delusional | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a brillent piece of poetry that encompases how a lot of unnoticed souls fall throgh the cracks of society to be attacked by media and degraded. I can relate a lot to this piece, always waiting for something better... though being noticed insn't such an issue as being seen on the news. Meh. Anyway, this was a deep and meaningful read, I liked it a lot. Keep it up I suppose, and peace. -rue
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]
      Every woman and girl do go through similar feelings. I will say I wish I was dead and have said but please, it is not that serious, I think it's just human for the thought to enter our minds. Although some have actually taken action behind it, I would not but this is a very good poem`
    | Posted on 2005-12-25 00:00:00 | by Mytee | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel for this girl every female goes through this
    we try and try but no one ever notices us. we get to a point ware its all to familiar and are tired of it so we resort to suicide druge being permiscus (i dont think its spelt right) or some of us choose to write. but i do think this is rather good

    xoxo
    that girl
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with PoeticSoul666, the whole thing was rockin awesome! I know a girl just like this. Everyone picked on her ever since kindergarten and a few days ago, she left, unable to go through life the way it was going for her. Great write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the whole thing. You really got your point across. The last 5-6 lines are my favorite! They sum it all up without giving away too much info.. et cetera.

    Nice write!
    AMber
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]


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