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    dots Submission Name: Sisterly Lovedots
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    Author: tmullins
    ASL Info:    37/F/Mo
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 127/149/41
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       I'm not sad that she's alive and well, I am sad that I do not have a relationship with her that the tv has portrayed to me that sisters are supposed to have. For the longest time I thought that was just tv.


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    She taught me how to hate.
    She taught me how to lose.
    She told me of my fate.
    A life, I had to choose.

    I was never good enough.
    Too dumb to be her friend,
    You think I had it rough?
    I loved her 'til the end.

    To her I could not compare.
    Her beauty and her wit.
    My feelings she didn't spare.
    I was but a little twit.

    I wanted her approval
    in all I ever did.
    She wanted my removal.
    I was just a little kid.

    Now the years have all passed.
    My life has changed so.
    I no longer kiss her ass.
    I am better than that I know.

    She cannot forgive me.
    The bad decisions that I made.
    A sister to her I will never be,
    this is what she said.

    Today I mourn the loss of my sister.
    The friend I never had.
    She's alive and well in Austin.
    And this makes me oh so sad.




    Submitted on 2005-11-19 10:17:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am so very sorry you had that type of relationship with your sister and that you do not have one even now. it must hurt very bad I know this I have a mother who left me when I was a baby. why? why do they cut ties off completely? these aren’t just some stranger they are blood relations. mother, father, sister, or whoever in the family. it is very disheartening I feel a lot for this piece it has touched me deeply. I’ve been very badly damaged mentally from what happen along with the way my stepmother treated me and my sister wasn’t very nice either. my sister and my stepmother would say things like “go find your mother” absolutely disgusting things to say to someone. this piece mean a lot to me. I am depressed to read this. take care and have the greatest blessings. I hope you one day can have a reconciliation with your sister.

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awesome.
    You have laid it all out for her to see. I hope she can read this.

    It is amazing what we feel after yrs go by and we have grown into adulthood. Raising our own kids brings everything to the forefront.
    Your mistakes were yours to make and as long as you forgive yourself than all will be right.
    She will come around when the time is right.
    She will know that she needs to know you as you are now.

    Thank youself for allowing to heal with this write.

    One small gammer error in S2L3. I think you meant rough.

    This is a nice and powerful write. forgiveness
    and acceptence will come.

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing how an unforgiving attitude can bleed the life out of a relationship and calcify anger into a religion of hatred. The canyon between your sister and yourself seems impassable; as if she chose to bury the past and make weekly visits to the gravesite. What's done is done, your only option is to remain strong and refuse to burn your end of the bridge. This was a simple subject in a common style with personal echoes of pain. Wish you the best.
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      There sounds like there is so much hurtfulness, bitterness and hate between the two sisters in this write and that is very sad. It takes one to make the move for healing the gape and I hope one makes this move. Years will pass and as one gets older, families need each other. I hope effort and time heals...

    God bless,
    Linda
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww! This is so sad. First of all, a lovely poem that expresses your obvious suffering with this subject. It is a shame that some people cannot find it in themselves to forgive. We are all human, we make mistakes, we make bad decisions and we learn from them. It takes a while of living before we finally get it right. Nobody is perfect, and nobody should be expected to be perfect. I am an only child, and I have times in my life when I feel bummed out that I never had a sibling. I think I missed out on a lot of things that siblings share. But then I realize that I had a good upbringing being just me and my mom so I shouldnt complain. But I feel for you, having a sister, who you cant have a meaningful relationship with. You need to realize that it is now her loss. If she cant be a good enough person to learn to forgive, then you shouldnt beat yourself up over it. A very sincere poem this is. Very well written and expressed. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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