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    dots Submission Name: I Loved You To Bitsdots
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    Author: vanhokinshtyl
    ASL Info:    8/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 119/200/71
    Words: 432
    Class/Type: Lyrics/You left me
    Total Views: 805
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2855



    Description:
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    This song is about a girl cheating on you and you witnessing it, but she doesn't know that you're there, but the guy does and he doesn't say anything, but just winks at you and at the end you kill her...hence the irony "I loved you to bits" (literally).


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    dotsI Loved You To Bitsdots
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    If you touch something hot for too long
    you will get burnt (i know)
    If you hold something long enough
    it will start to hurt (i know)
    One crack leads to another
    then this wall will tumble and fall
    but having something is better
    than having nothing at all

    He winks to me,
    as she leads him up the stairs
    into her room,
    she's bringing his decieving smile
    to bed with her tonight
    how long will I bite
    these bleeding fingernails of mine

    I am positive
    that I am unsure
    I gave you my love
    you gave it to him
    This is adulteration
    even though we're kids

    If you fall in love
    you will surely fall

    You are positive
    that you are unsure
    you gave him our love
    he stole it from you
    now he's sharing it
    with someone else too (new)

    This can't go on forever
    this cycle has to brake

    If you touch something hot for too long
    you will get burnt (i know)
    If you hold something long enough
    it will start to hurt (i know)
    One crack leads to another
    then this wall will tumble and fall
    but having something is better
    than having nothing at all

    What I don't know
    won't hurt me
    but what I suspect
    is killing us
    you've led me on
    beyond long enough

    and now you tell me all the things you mean
    you say you "miss" and "love" me
    but I don't believe a thing
    I'm finding out I spoke for myself when I said
    those things before
    but I meant them though,
    I came to surprise you
    but you surprised me in an awful way
    now I'm downstairs walking around your living room
    but I'm sure that I'll be dying soon
    I tune into your screams
    I can hear everything
    you burnt down everything we've built
    and left me inside to incenerate
    but I'll keep coming back

    I'll forgive, and give in again,
    then forgive again
    you're forgiven again

    So put on a sad song
    and your goodbye lips
    it all comes back to me
    with that last kiss
    I can't forget that kiss
    but it's you I'll really miss
    after, I love you to bits,

    and when you brought wings upon my sleeve
    you helped me to fly,
    and when you brought brains upon my skull
    it was love at first sight,
    but when you left me here
    with only a wink of an eye
    that was the night I realized
    this time
    it's your death not mine




    Submitted on 2005-11-19 10:25:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...

    "she's bringing his decieving smile
    to bed with her tonight
    how long will I bite
    these bleeding fingernails of mine"

    I love that, I can hear it in my mind. Especially the latter part, I love it. And the line "you gave him our love" It's just such an interesting thought - just the thought of her giving him your love...intriguing.
    Keep Writing
    -Caribou-
    p.s. sorry there's rarely anything other than praise
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a really good song, you put alot of emotion int2 it, i luved it so much. i liked the ending, was it ment 2 mean u luv her so much you thought this was going 2 kill you but really in the end it killed her?
    it is kinda like mine but yours is way better.
    thanx 4 u feedbak

    luv chaos
    | Posted on 2005-11-26 00:00:00 | by divine chaos | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very nice song. Being a guitarist myself, I love to wright songs like this. My favorite line of this song is "what I don't know, won't hurt me, but what I suspect is killing us, you've led me on beyond long enough"...This line has so much truth in it. This is a very strong poem. Keep it up. You too are a great writer
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by Jussy | [ Reply to This ]
      this was awesome. it was unique. it was just wow. I can't even help you edit it or anything. I'm sorry, I just had to praise this.
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem almost brought me to tears. I love your writings and I love you because you can write them so beautifully. I can definately relate to this poem, I feel like this a lot. I really love someone, but they already have a girlfriend and he's a few years older than me, but I feel like I can't live without him. Anyway, I got off subject I think, this was a very good poem, I'm adding you to submission stalk and adding this to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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