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    dots Submission Name: My heart on the roaddots
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    Author: tmullins
    ASL Info:    37/F/Mo
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 127/149/41
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       my husband is a truck driver and at times the truck "tears" him away from his family, not death, just wanted to straighten that out!


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    dotsMy heart on the roaddots
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    I never thought it would happen.
    Didn't think it could be.
    A wonderful, gorgeous, man
    could fall in love with me?

    You made my life whole.
    You filled everey space.
    The other half to my soul.
    I long to see your face.

    Soon, I know you'll come home.
    So I wait patiently.
    'til the time I'm no longer alone.
    When you park that truck for me.

    I walk through this house,
    the walls are all the same.
    Everything's still here.
    Nothing has changed.

    Your shoes still sit in the closet floor
    Clothes hanging, waiting to be worn.
    Socks still folded in the dresser drawer.
    As if from my life you were never torn.




    Submitted on 2005-11-19 10:56:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great poem, and one that I can connect with soo well.. My hubby used to drive truck and would be gone for extended periods of time.. I actually do have a couple poems that I wrote at that time , I'm gonna have to dig them out and add them ..:)thank you for the great read..
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by rosered | [ Reply to This ]
      This is another lovely write! It must be difficult to have him leave on those long journeys and be away from you so long and fairly frequently. I have always thought truck drivers lives must be somewhat difficult and strained from being seperated from their family so often. I guess on the other side of the coin, it must make for some wonderful and happy times spent together when he comes home. You never take the time you have with him for granted. Very nice poem you have here and well written. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very well written write
    I liked the fact that you mentioned the little things around the house that remind you of him
    With these items you were able to grasp his pressence and keep him close even though hes far away
    That was the best part of this poem to me
    A great Job

    And thank you for your comments on The Rose
    I am really glad you liked it
    I will be looking for more of your writes
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Thsi is very nice indeed. Small error on S2L2.
    (Every).

    Sounds like you cherish you man allot. It is nice to come home from the road and have someone waiting for you.
    The smell of the house, the smell of your mate.

    Every person has a smell and that is the chemical balance of lovers. I take something of my wifes when I go on the road so I can have her smell.

    This was very well written and speaks of a longing to be together.

    Isn't nice to get it right? Finding the right one to share all that you have.

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]


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