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    dots Submission Name: pOSEr CUNtdots
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    Author: Hiruetske
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 10/16/8
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 609
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       There you have it. My first post on this account. I had a bunch before, until I was locked up for about five months. Anyway, this is how I write. I write what I feel. Enjoy!


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    Sometimes my body wanders around,
    Aimless to all but my own heart's sound.
    This shit that comes out of my hands
    Is a blasphemous to certain men.
    I realy do not give a shit.
    You don't agree, then deal with it.
    Yeah, I carved into a desk at school,
    But don't copy me like you think it's cool.
    Don't be a poser like I used to be.
    Just be yourself and set your soul free.
    Wait, this isn't what I used to be!
    What the fuck's happening to me?
    I used to dress like a fuckin' clown,
    The biggest freak in all the town.
    But I'm not like Slipknot or Korn,
    I'm just a guy who watches porn.
    I listen to whatever I want,
    Not like those fuckin' poser cunts.
    So many say what I already say.
    I make up new shit everyday.
    Forcing me to just sit at home,
    And listen to these songs alone.
    But when I show myself, I'm prone
    To kill when they rattle my bones.
    Sometimes it feels like I'm the only
    Person in the whole wide world
    Who knows how to just be myself,
    To not go out and fuckin' pose.
    Forever could I keep talking,
    But no, I think I'll keep on walking.
    There's one more thing for me to say.
    Just be yourself! Stop this bullshit today!




    Submitted on 2005-11-19 13:11:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm i dont know whether to congratulate you or hate you. first of all it kills me when people accuse everyone in sight of being a poser. im sure i could call up a dozen people who would readily call me a poser(though of course not to my face..) sometimes things you do are similar to what other people do but you do it anyway because not doing it just to spite people would be the hugest poser move ever. i wear black but im not goth i like manson but i dont worhsip him. but for the black and the manson alone so called gothic people everythwre claim that im a poser even without me saying i am gothic. on the other hand its cool that you claim to be yourself. its something a lot of people are insecure in doing. however because of the poser comment im not so sure that you arentone of those people who go around claiming to be themselves when what theyre really doing is going against everyone just to be totally seperate so they can call themselves original and them [censored] when people are intruigued.. im just not sure. now dont hop up and claim that im a [censored] for saying all this because come on if you truly are yourself then you know exactly what kind of bull[censored] comes from other people pretending to be unique when we are all people and when everyones a freak noone is. peace love and lollipops
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by namesdontmatter | [ Reply to This ]
      I happen to like this and you express yourself well...ummm i like the whole "be yourself" message in this its very strong and you knew hpow to emphasize it...good job

    <3 Adalae
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmm! this is more of a subject matter that i would expect in a punk or hardcore song. It really doesn't translate well into poetry though to tell you the truth.
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, this was alright when it started but then it's turned into just a few random thoughts and an exuse to cuss and call it "poetry". I think that you really need to work on this caze as of right now it doesn't have a flow and really has the feeling of a card board box. You have some writing skills, as shown at the start of this, but you need to work on useing them for the whole thing.
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]


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