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    dots Submission Name: The one I almost let get awaydots
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    Author: Akili
    Elite Ratio:    2.36 - 915/400/60
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       AKA another crappy and super sappy teenage poem.

    I wrote this though I have no idea why. Well, I do but I'm never going to tell any of you :P

    Just tell me what ya think, if it's so sappy that you get cought in the strands of suger or what.


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    dotsThe one I almost let get awaydots
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    Never believe in love at first sigh
    it値l never work out anyway.
    Even when loving the same guy again and again
    it値l only break you apart
    So why do I keep losing my heart?

    I almost had one that walked away
    almost allowed him to go today.
    But you can never lose what you never had.

    A pitiful sigh of love
    something you always try to stop.
    Never thought it could happen to me
    never thought that it ever should.
    So what can you do when your heart turns traitor?

    I allowed him to go by again
    almost lost him in tears
    and almost allowed him to dream of me.

    Dream of a white wedding
    knowing that it can never be.
    Better to have lost and yet I壇 rather give up
    and rid myself of this love, sometimes.

    Even if he was the last one on earth
    I壇 never allow him to see
    this crappy poem I知 writing again

    In years we値l drift apart again
    and I値l smile sadly
    Tell myself it was always for the best.
    Wish him the best of all luck.
    And hope he値l have many a happy day.

    And if I see him on the street
    I値l stop him and chat
    We can talk about school and what we池e doing then

    And maybe he値l have a child in tow
    someone he can call his own.
    My heart will sometimes crack
    but I値l wish him the best of luck.
    And walk merrily on my way.




    Submitted on 2005-11-19 14:15:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thats so sweet. I couldn't have done it better. I really understand stand what your going thiugh here, been a time or two before. I just love it.
    Keep it up hun,
    -Jenny
    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Well...I for one do absolutely believe in love at first sight. I'll never forget the day I first saw my wife Doris Jean and presto...love at first sight!
    When the day comes it will hit ya like a ton of bricks nd you will have no more doubts.
    I the meantime I enjoyed read'n your poem and wish you the best of luck with the one you almost let get away!
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      nice write. it was a little to romantic for my taste but it was written well. the only problems i could find were one or to spelling errors but thats nothin. well thats bout all i can say.
    -brandon
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Leon Kennedy | [ Reply to This ]
      this is awesome. im totally into a guy right now and im really goofy about it. but i went through a rough breakup a while ago and i still cant look back at that fondly. so i can really relate to this.
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by namesdontmatter | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwwww, nooooooo, DON'T LET HIM GO! Alright, sorry, I had to be girly for a second or two, lol. You are such a hopeless romantic "I壇 never allow him to see
    this crappy poem I知 writing"

    hehehehehee, I love you. You can't be serious long enough, I mean, if I want to be in a better mood, I'll just walk right up to you, you can't let me be depressed for more then 5 seconds, its like COMPLETELY impossible, lol. I love you Akili, adn I want you to be happy, NO MATTER WHAT! Even if you have to get rid of me and my psychotic friends, WE'D UNDERSTAND, tohugh we'd call you names behind you back, we'd really LOVE you in our hearts...well, besides that one jealous b*tch who thinks the world revolves around her...I'M SORRY, I know its not all about me, BUT I FORGET!

    Heh heh heh,
    I<3U!
    Bon
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
      Well you have just made a statement, but only wrote a title! lol! but i'm sure whatever it was that it had more sap in it than a tree! lol! :-P
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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