Description: thankx to someone's help, i redid this, and im just now getting it up.
Tranquility lost -------------------------------------------
I'm lost in a sea of not so tranquil apathy;
broken for eternity.
Smiling a shallow smile,
I'll wear me fake grin for a while.
I hate to wear this mask,
but it's so I can last.
Crimson tears make a red river upon my arm,
I don't care that it can harm.
It makes me feel...
It makes me feel real.
Crimson tears make a red river uponmy wrist;
the pain is the cause of my shallow breaths.
I'm lost in a sea of not so tranquil equanimity;
my red river turns to a sea.
I wear my mask so that no one sees:
I need help but no one hears my hidden pleas.
As my crimson tears turn into a sea upon my wrist,
You can't see the blood on my clenched fists.
Once I'm finished, I'll be in a sea of real tranquility:
I'll finally be at peace,
When they burry me.
This is a fantastic write where you showed your very being with every word This write is very personal and I congratulate you for getting it off your chest By writing this Im sure your feeling better with yourself You let a lot of negative energy out by writing it Just grab at the positives now and fill that empty space you just created up with them Stay positive! Take Care Ron
Oh my gosh I must certianly congratulate you ... I 've just read your poem and I found very powerfull. The pictures I could see through your work was just mindlowing. I wish I could write like you. Good luck. "Crimson tears make a red river upon my arm" Iloved this line and the final one was one of a kind "When they burry me"