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    dots Submission Name: A hazy shade of bluedots

    Author: Toadslayer
    ASL Info:    35/Female/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 32/38/15
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Thoughts on nightfall.

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    dotsA hazy shade of bluedots

    Night time slipping
    noctural sounds abound
    once a hazy shade of blue
    now dark and dreary.

    Movement ceases as
    the day time creatures dream
    away the quiet moments
    nestled in the unawares.

    Cool gentle breezes
    across my face
    silky nothingness
    to ponder away my time.

    Its raining now
    my insides all awry
    what sky and cloud now do
    for now will be denied.

    Submitted on 2004-04-23 11:56:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nightfall...it's a beautiful site. And i never really paid attention to it till today. When i read your poem, i thought of how nightfall starts...and what goes on during nighttime. Spooky...and it send chills down my spine.
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Bravo!!! This narrative was felt clear through to my bones. Vivid and strangely inviting...Love, Peace, Joy!!!
    | Posted on 2004-04-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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