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    dots Submission Name: 4...the luv of..."iT"dots
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    Author: elohimswork
    ASL Info:    30/M/Chi
    Elite Ratio:    4.54 - 76/96/39
    Words: 500
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 211
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 4260



    Description:
       this has been under reconstruction.
    a poetic story
    using the worlds daily happenings as the backdrop
    for this piece.

    peace...


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    dots4...the luv of..."iT"dots
    -------------------------------------------


    "iT's" master puppeter
    adopted the street name john,
    because it worked well
    4 his line of business's.
    he had that all seeing eye
    4 your darkerside.

    yet he knew he needed a better plan
    to insnare in as many as he can.
    so...he introduced 7 deadly friends
    to work with his puppet "iT"...

    Unified
    they became the
    magnificent 8.
    producing pin point results
    with there new sales push.
    "iT's" name...
    was getting all the fame.
    but...that was...allllright...
    his silent partners never wanted
    the hype & neon lights.

    if "iT" got rubbed out
    it wouldn't even matter
    the whole system was
    designed...4 plug & play
    anyway.

    now...
    "iT's" gift 4 gab was
    scalling tall buildings in
    every single unrehearsed verse.
    he just knew he was
    putting in work...
    walking the city like he had a "S"
    on his chest.

    yet...

    quiet as kept to us.
    8 was making you...lust 4..."iT"
    8 made sure your pride lived in dependency 4..."iT"
    then 8 said...they shall envy 4..."iT"
    they shall become wrath 4..."iT"
    sloth shall become there idol
    while in persuit 4..."iT"

    the pay off...
    now 8 knew...when they had "iT"...it wasnt enough...
    so...they would have 2 do more...to get more
    4 even more of..."iT"
    they gluttonized 4..."iT"

    they...became...thee...addicted whores 4..."iT"...

    now...
    "iT" had it good
    he went from
    jeans, T's, & starter coats
    to sporting...
    Italian suits & ostrich shoes.
    from...
    bringing in only a couple at a time...
    to...
    having a line that went across state lines.

    let him...
    see a glimpse of his reflection
    an...stop.
    &...stop.

    "mirror...mirror
    on the wall...
    who's the most
    tre chic of them all..."

    there goes the wink an
    "Thats right..."

    you see...
    he luved flossin
    his big bossman shoes.


    now...
    every man...woman...an child in line
    recieved his
    newly designed
    raised water mark business cards.
    that listed what he was...
    all...about.
    straight down to 7.

    1st one was power...
    slots 2 & 3 shared the twin sons
    materialism & money...
    & 4...was luvs cousin acceptance.

    then he would
    commence to mesmorize you
    on how well watered
    he keeps his garden of eden
    but never with what...
    the other mysterious...3
    because his thumb
    always seemed to cover...
    the tiny print
    written in invisible ink...4

    coca leaf...
    poppy seeds...
    & whiskey,
    known to his
    faithful followers as liquor.

    Now...
    it should be said that...
    every seeded deed
    4 this sacred fruit harvest
    was orchrastrated by that...
    Oh...so...dilligent, devilish,
    undercover, mastermind, pimp
    known 2 his subjects as
    "Excessiveness"...

    who...had long since divorced
    his mistress
    "In-moderation"...
    4 slowin his movement...


    Everybody...
    wanted "iT"
    but if you blinked
    you'll never see that
    "E"...ran it all...



    4 fingers an a pen poetry...






    Submitted on 2005-11-20 18:38:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wahtever dude,
    You know me and I know that this is the start of a full blown thought. The cousins cocoaleaf and poppy seed, materialismand money... I like that marriage.
    The PIMP and his divorce...MAN...You know you knocking on som,som there.
    With or without the misspelled words this is a good piece. This makes you think about how all this craziness started...
    Thanks for the contemplation my brotha..
    Keep Liven and Loven Life...
    Holla at ya gurl...
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by smalltown | [ Reply to This ]
      such a statement, i hate seeing it bogged down by so many errors and misspelled words...fixing that would make this such a wonderful piece...
    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]
      ?uestion
    ask yourself
    what would you do 4.."IT"...

    and onwards, can be left out. As any poem raises question, it should not, nor is it needed to state the question inside the poem. This only narrows the possible thourghts of the readers, and in this case, I think it flattens the poem.
    Also pinning a moral to the poem is something that instead of a stetement, should grow from within the poem.
    That aside, I like the poem overall.

    -tZar
    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by tZar | [ Reply to This ]



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