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    dots Submission Name: Miscarriagedots
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    Author: Indigo Kid
    ASL Info:    33/f/everywhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 428/438/115
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       After an abortion that I wanted and he did not, I had a miscarriage and he was more happy then I. I wanted the baby badly, and he is upset that the first one is gone with my desicion and not his... Bad times...


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    dotsMiscarriagedots
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    It moves and is there
    And I can feel us there and
    Once again I am alive

    Yet I remember more then you do
    About the past and for once I am so
    Happy and so complete

    Then it is over and I am left
    To pick up the pieces alone and
    Battered by me and mostly you…







    Submitted on 2005-11-20 23:26:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can so relate to this poem. and it breaks my heart to see that I'm not alone. I also can relate to your life story. It is hard when you are grieving in completely different ways over different issues. It hurts and it leaves an hollow feeling. Much like I get from this poem. Wonderful job expressing your pain. I'm so sorry you are going through this. Hang in there.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Empty...the one true emotion that I feel from this.

    Other then that there is nothing else that I can say cause your description says it all.

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    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      perhaps finding another word to relace there, but otherwise you get across the point you wanted. a good short piece.
    the fact you bring up the past is a strong pointer.
    keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
      the emptiness of this work was surely felt, but the line 'I can us there' kind of lost me so I read it four more time and still it wasn't clear as to where there is, but other then that over all I thought it good
    | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]


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