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    dots Submission Name: The Bloodied Daggerdots
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    Author: Tarek Refaat
    ASL Info:    24/m/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 370/508/212
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 153
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1729



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    dotsThe Bloodied Daggerdots
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    The Bloodied Dagger

    Fear And Anger
    Drive like thunder
    To swift your soul
    Like a burning fire

    Like a dagger lunging inside you
    Striking through you very existence
    Paralyzing you
    Rendering you helpless

    Watching the blood stream down the dagger
    Losing control

    And the anger breaks loose
    The energy takes control
    And you pull out the dagger
    And turn it around
    Striking back at your attacker

    Again
    And again and again
    With all your pain
    With all you fear
    With all your hate
    With all your existence

    The blood splashing all over
    A blood bath
    And the more you strike
    The weaker you get

    Why did it come down to this?
    You will never know
    But you had to fight back
    You had to not let go

    You drop unconsciously
    To your knees
    Your eyes open but your mind absent
    Giving in and thinking it is your end

    For once you prevailed against your anger
    Your fears
    You faced them
    And killed them
    But more will come back to haunt you again
    And just as you drop down eyes shut
    And you think its all over
    And your world is done and no more

    A cold breeze of air brushes your hair
    And a your heart heals
    And beats again..
    A Miracle ?
    Perhaps..

    Your eyes open
    Slowly..
    You’re alive
    Your life starts once again
    But your scar is there to remind you
    You’ve conquered your fears and anger






    Submitted on 2005-11-21 02:47:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The repitition is ok, and i love the flow and linear pattern of the story. Overall great job, although the repitition may get a little old.


    ~Kane~
    | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this poem had a nice length not too long and not tooo short. the ending of the poem was nice and ended it well i liked these two lines the best

    But you had to fight back
    You had to not let go

    other the that u repeated ur self a bit but that made it clearer to the reader.

    ++My Pain++
    | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by my pain | [ Reply to This ]



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