Description: Actually this is about a girl that i love much, she is the only reason why i want to attend Operation research class since she always lighten me up. But she is getting aways likes she only like me as her bro since she is older than me T_T.
Btw i want any comments, such as, wheter its beautiful or not, also grammar check , romantic or not, also seek for any comments good or bad
Loving You in Eternity -------------------------------------------
The way you smiling at me
is the sweetest smile that i ever seen
The day we met for the first time
is the day that i won't regret
I made you the angel inside my heart
Believing that your wings will take me to the moon
Hoping that we have no sorrow for tomorrow
The joy reflected on your eyes
is the one that i saw once in my dream
I can't wait no longer to lie to you
that i truly love you, even you never understand
You no longer hold me back from giving up
I start to panic, have I done something wrong?
My tears is flowing as my tomorrow is vanishing
The way you left me alone
Makes my heart burn like hell
But the feather left inside my heart
Give me another reason to keep loving you
The Wings inside my heart keep me away from detesting you
Now i believe...........
That its just me that loving you in eternity
Garnet4David this was a really really sweet poem. I think this girl needs to freaking realize that you like her already. By your words and writing you obviously like her and maybe even falling in love with her. I hope things go your way. Good luck David.....dreams are never too far to reach. -Christina aka POETRY
I thought this poem was really nice. I understand how it is to have that true love be away from you, and it hurts. But trust me, if she feels the same way you do about her, she'll be back fa'sho. You don't think you're romantic? For someone to take time out to write anything at all about someone, is a romantic person to me. Keep it up
I like that...and I do have to admit it's true love can hurt like hell, but that's why we always have our friends there when we need them. I would say which were my favorite parts, but to be honest with you...I like it all.
I like the way you express your feels in this poem. I was a little confused in verse three when you say "I can't wait any longer to lie to you". I think sometimes people feelings change because they are afraid of being hurt. Sometimes you have to let love fly away and if it is true it will come back to you. I wish alot of luck. Good poem. lynn
Garnet4David, this was nice...sorry that this had to happen to you, I hope that things will clear out your way. I really enjoyed reading it, it was not romantic, but sweet instead.
Submission Name: Loving You in Eternity
, romantic or not, also seek for any comments good or bad
