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Snow


Author: Tabbie Kat
ASL Info:    16/female/middleofnowhere
Elite Ratio:    2.68 - 37 /19 /5
Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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Snow



The first snow fall makes you think.
The first bud makes you smile
The sun shines and makes you laugh
and the leaves change and make you groan.

Seasons change along with the people.
Enjoying life until your tired of it.
Laughing until your sick happens in the spring
when it's easy to smile because of temps at a
pleaseant range. and flowers just poking up from the ground

Summer makes you smile, with the new tan and great beach. Parties and travel all happen here.

Fall brings the groans of back to school.
no more fun or smiles
back to the work and chores of life

Seasons change along the attitudes of life




Submitted on 2005-11-21 10:22:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  nice simple poem, not too profound, but observant and true so it works well. i like how the first stanza sort of sets it up and then the others follow the same pattern, that was a nice detail.
| Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by colerinja | [ Reply to This ]
  I didn't get any profound revelations from this piece! lol! but i applaud you for your descriptions in this work though, and that is truly a strength that should be cultivated.
| Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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