nice job there. i likd it. its bt it sounds a little kiddish-not that it is a disadvatage bbt a plus point for it cmes straight from the "i dont like math" kid. good. Ps:do visit my pg. n comment the poetry wasif
st1: the first stanza looks sharp. I can feel the stress of the numbers and the “sigh” fits in beautifully. and the rhyme also is great.
st2: here there is that pesky repeater “that” and “that” perhaps the last line can be “where in God’s name is it at? I must admit I am no flow king here that could be choppy to some perhaps “where the hell is it at?” regardless is funny and enjoyable.
st3: so I was looking around on the net because I had no idea what a inverse trinometric ratio was and let me tell ya! I swear by the hairs on my pet frog, your poem popped up in the search. Take a bow, I think you invented a new term! I kid, I kid, I think you were going for “trigonometric ratio” but perhaps it was intentional maybe it was that way to produce the feeling that one doesn’t know much about it, hey I know I didn’t sheesh I had to look the freaking thing up! As for the rhyme here it dissolved quickly I do wonder if the third line can read like this: “if I was a side, I warn” ~or~ “if I was a side, I’m torn” personally I think the first one is better.
st4: this stanza the pattern changes so that is cool. I like the numeral swimming in the mind and then the crying on the fourth line both being fluids.
st5: this stanza the frustration is good “blink” and “sinking in” perhaps you could go with “on this mess yet nothing will sink” or perhaps and the end of the second line, instead of “blink” use “twitch” nervous twitch and on the last line there put something like or verbatim “and math still is a b*tch”
st6: very close here I would probably change the second line to better fit the fourth line such as “Einstein would bounce of the wall” and the last line seems like it should have an “it” between “f*ck” and “all” as in “f*ck it all”
Funny piece, I agree with the feelings here I do not like math myself. Well done,
Math...and me...is like...oil...and vinegar...all of those terms you just used...they refresh my memory...but just not for their use. I cheated and took accounting class! LMFAO!
This was funny though...I can remember myself at the kitchen table cursing out the math book...my head hanging low as I layed in on my hands...FRUSTRATED! Needless to say...homework rarely got finished. I think that is why I need anger management to this day...
hee hee! very funny, and man, can I identify! aah! I hate math! it sucks! But this poem was funny, witty, I suppose, and cute. But, on the third stanza, what does 'et al' mean? Was that maybe a typo? hmmmm... The ending was great!