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    dots Submission Name: Reflectiondots
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    Author: hidden_cry
    ASL Info:    16/female/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 23/25/13
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 170
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 983



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    dotsReflectiondots
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    I looked into a mirror today,
    I dont know how to say.
    All the mistakes that I have made,
    They just make me fade.

    I looked into a mirror today.
    I didnt like what I saw,
    But still all I do is fall.
    I hate you why did you do this to me,
    You messed me up so bad I cant even see.

    I looked into a mirror today.
    I saw something in your eyes,
    Why do you do this keep feeding everyone lies.
    I know what your thinking,
    Dont do it your just going to keep sinking.

    I looked into a mirror today.
    I know what your going to do,
    Im not going to stop you.
    I couldnt if i tried,
    Because Im just your reflection, your better side.

    I looked into a mirror today.
    I saw myself take out a knife,
    And try to end my life.
    I cut my wrist hoping it was the last,
    But Im here so theres more pain to come all too fast.




    Submitted on 2005-11-21 19:36:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem was easy to read and had a nice length to it i especailly like the second last stanza the last line of it was a very twisted line i liked it heaps. although like your other poem i read the ryhming of some of your stanza's were very confusing and didn't really relate to the poem these two lines are and example, i don't like what i saw, but still all i do is fall... this is mixing up past and present it should be, i don't like what i see, but still i allways seem to fall. anywayz thats my opinion
    ++My Pain++
    | Posted on 2005-11-26 00:00:00 | by my pain | [ Reply to This ]



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