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Submission Name: just a lie dots

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Author:	namesdontmatter
Elite Ratio:	3.06 - 62/89/29
Words:	107

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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Description:
its so easy to pretend

just a lie dots

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smile like youre not crying on the inside
a broken heart is easy to hide
false cheerfullness, and makeup
can hide the tearstained eyes

laugh a little louder, act like you dont care
pretend to be having fun
and remember not to stare

smile, laugh, dont stare
so many things to remember
dont freeze up, or start to cry
that would ruin this pretty picture

laugh a little louder, act like you dont care
pretend to be having fun
and remember not to stare

but you do care
and you do cry
and you want to stare
and this is just a lie

Submitted on 2005-11-21 22:56:45 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is another one I had added to my favourites, and again it makes me want to cry.

"laugh a little louder, act like you dont care
pretend to be having fun
and remember not to stare"

This is just so great. I'm choking up and losing words.
Keep Writing
-Caribou-
| Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
  Yes it is definitely easy to pretend. Wow...I read that and I kinda realized I pretend a lot. If I smile and I laugh and I act like I'm not dying on the inside, a part of ME almost believes it. I can push my pain down way down inside of me, but that doesn't mean it's not there. I guess a lot of people do that...anyway...you hit somewhere with me with your words...great job. Thanks for writing this. ~hailie~
| Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a really nice poem.
"smile like youre not crying on the inside
a broken heart is easy to hide
false cheerfullness, and makeup
can hide the tearstained eyes"

i sometimes feel like that & i guess that thats why i liked that verse so much.you took the words right out of my heart. lol
i also see ppl in my school that act like some of the things you said.it's either the act fake to fit in or just R fake.
anywho- i really liked the poem.good work!
- _Dancing_alone_
| Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by _Dancing_Alone_ | [ Reply to This ]
  ...[censored]...another piece as strong as the first one i read from you. I love the strength in your words, even though they seem so simple. There's so much power, and anger and hurt...it's...i don't even know. Just keep writing, i can't wait to read more.
| Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
  Beautiful, I am falling in love with your broken hearted poems.
This is such a strong poem that I have tears in my eyes. It makes me think so much of the past...I really don't know what to say beyond that. This is just amazing. It kicks so much bum and you need to smile through your tears and be proud. There aren't many people who can taken something so upsetting and make it so great without it sounding like the same thing we've all read over and over and over again.

*big huge hug*
Never Stop Writing
-Caribou-
| Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
  this was definatly a strong work...I enjoyed it and for a four-word description that summed it up pretty well...that could be someone's "life-story" lols. I loved this as a whole and I don't think the format is lacking in any way...usually I'd frown on repetition but your stanza "laugh a little louder,act like you don't care/pretend to be having fun/and remember not to stare" actually in my opinion intensified this one and I felt they were good lines...one might assume staring is alittle thing not worth mentioning but I've had problems gazing off into space/not making eye contact when I'm bummed...alot of these lines really hit me the write way...I think this is a very powerful work.I'm adding this one to my favorites. The only thing I would have liked to see is a little more detail but even that I don't feel personally as a reader for this one is needed. great write. keep writing.
Peace
| Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  The sentiments of the piece was quite emotional and strong. The form of the poem itself seemed a little random in the reading. Overall, a good poem.
| Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]

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