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    dots Submission Name: Natural Mysterydots

    Author: Jussy
    ASL Info:    21 ...guy....waterworld
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 66/64/21
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This piece is mostly about serching inside of yourself. There is a beauty and mystery inside of each person if you search your spiritual side long enough. If you search long enough you will find that love has not died in you.

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    dotsNatural Mysterydots

    Look between the place of shadow
    and the tree leaves on the ground.
    Past the particles of air that float place to place,
    through the iris and into my mind.
    Walk past the weeping willow down to the creek,
    where my round friends lay and accept
    their destiny.
    float on.
    Love has a face.

    Submitted on 2005-11-21 23:01:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was cool...pretty different concept than most of the "searching yourself" poems where the person only finds pain and nothing worth searching for at all. (*looks around...why are you pointing at ME?*;))
    good write. keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. I now got a slightly different view on, like you said"searching inside yourself". I like how this could be directed towards others and make them feel good about themselves, or something like that. It was nice.
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by canarddoue | [ Reply to This ]

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