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    dots Submission Name: i would but i cantdots
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    Author: namesdontmatter
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/89/29
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       this is a bit mean but whatever lifes a bitch and this might make you think i am too but you dont know me and even if you did you might still think i was a bitch but a long as youre not the chick who gives me her jello every day i dont care. and if you are PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE still give me the jello.


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    id write you a love letter but im out of stamps
    and ps i dont love you

    id call you and tell you how i feel
    but i dont have a quarter
    but ill leave you a message if i decide i feel like it

    i would write an email to say im sorry
    but i forgot my password
    fwd: lack of apology

    forget the convenient ways of communicating
    ill tell you to your face
    i forgot the cliché
    im sorry can we be friends
    so i submitted the
    i never want to see you again
    and im not sorry




    Submitted on 2005-11-21 23:03:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I added this to my favourites a forever ago and I'm rereading it and I still love it and I'm thinking about sending it to my recent ex, lol.
    I love it.
    Keep Writing
    -Caribou-

    "id write you a love letter but im out of stamps
    and ps i dont love you"
    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      I would love to tell that to someone...Hell [censored] yes! You're not a [censored], just fed up with the [censored] world and the [censored]es in it. This was brilliant, i woulnd't change a word...i love this piece so much because this is exactly how i feel about someone...simply brilliant...
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
      lol, I loved this, like really loved it. Like favourite loved it. lol. Okay, getting past the love, because that's what this poem lacked - but in the best way possible. This is one of the greatest pieces I've read in a while and I don't know if you intended the humour - esp since you labeled the poem as *serious* - but it gave me a giggle.
    Although I didn't understand how you could leave them a message if you weren't even going to call them to begin with...but it's all jello. That reminds me, I'm not *The* jello chick, but I'm more then happy to share cause I don't really like jello, but I like to make it sometimes...

    Keep Writing
    -Caribou-
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe lol yay for [censored]yness. This was awesome...sorry maybe I'm not meant to take it like this but this is [censored] hillarious! rofl. I loved the concept here...the excuses were ammusing too...my favorite stanza would have to be "I'd write an email to say I'm sorry/but I forgot my password/ fwd:lack of apology"This whole thing was brilliant...o and I"m not the jello girl but the jello is all gone...there's no more on earthO.o so you're screwed lol anyways good write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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