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    dots Submission Name: Go Awaydots

    Author: dx10687
    ASL Info:    22 / M / IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 13/19/18
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Story/Friendship
    Total Views: 776
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Thought of it this morning when I was taking a shower. Amazingly where most of my ideas come from.

    Just saying how there are a couple of people in my life that for some reason are telling me to go away and i dont kno why they are saying it.

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    dotsGo Awaydots

    Go Away
    Go Away
    It is all that you will say to me

    I'm just trying to be a nice guy
    And you throit back in my face

    Go Away
    Go Away
    It is all that you will say to me

    All I want to know is what I did
    I ask you nicely to tell me but
    All I hear yu say to me is

    Go Away
    Go Away
    Will you please just tell me why

    Submitted on 2005-11-22 08:05:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is a little foggy and emotionless, I'd have to say. You express your confusion well, but don't pass the confusion on to the reader.
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
      Im not understanding excatly, im not sure the point or what it was it was about, mabey if u added more detail it would make it more clear, well ttyl keep writin
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Solemn Star 88 | [ Reply to This ]

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