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    dots Submission Name: Unbelieveddots
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    Author: Sarah Leger
    ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436/387/80
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1045
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 409



    Description:
       eh another poem gave met his idea
    decided to write on it

    Blessed Be


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    dotsUnbelieveddots
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    Morning
    Like glory
    Cold still air
    Laying next to you
    Laying wrapped up in you
    Arms around me
    Breath against my neck
    The light catches my eye
    And I start to cry
    Because no matter what I say
    You'll always believe
    That I don't really love you
    Even though
    No matter how much I try
    I can't help but do




    Submitted on 2005-11-22 13:34:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is deep
    You expressed yourself quite well in these short words
    The Love you hold for another is true
    But if you look at this poem both of you are in A bed cuddling does that not show a return of the Love you give
    A very Good Write
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      My love believes that I don't love him as well. Even though you try your hardest to get your pint across they still don't get it. Self-centered should I say? No matter what...you should always know within yourself what the truth is and let all the worries that they place upon you float away. You know you love him...inside I am sure that he knows as well. You can only give so much of yourself.

    Much love forever and always,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      it is sometimes true that no matter what you say or do they will never believe you. it is sad and at times heart breaking, especially when you're trying to tell them that you love them. and when you've had enough and end it, they say that it's true you never loved them. i really do like youre poem.

    suzi
    | Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by sushi wok | [ Reply to This ]
      yes, yes the unbelievers, some people no matter what you do, no matter how long you try to get thru, they just don't think they can be loved, for whatever the reason, the things you see in them, they are completely blind to...nice write, full of truth, me like it...

    Milo
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Milo shanley | [ Reply to This ]
      the last line really threw me it lost me altogether,I feel that its somehow not complete, though i can fully understand the gist of it whn someone you care doesn't believe they entiled to you love.but i feel it could be a good piece it rewrote a little
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]


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