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Dear White Amercia


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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I wrote this for black history month lol i know it's not here yet but i'm waiting lol. But yea tell me what cha think.


Dear White Amercia



Dear White America
we forgive you for taking African Men
and women away from their homes
just to become slaves in a land that did
not belong to you.

Dear White America,
We forgive you for taking away
African Men and Women's names
and giving them names you can pronounce

Dear White America,
We forgive you for making Black men and Women
Work from sun up to sun down in the hot blazing sun.

Dear White America
We forgive you for raping black women
making them bare YOUR offspring
just so YOUR children could be sold as slaves

Dear White America
we forgive you for refusing
to free black slaves after
years and years of serveatude

Dear White America
we fogive you for when slaves were free
you segragated everything and made
it hard to be black in America the land of th FREE

Dear White America
We forgive you for killing blakc men
when they refused to be fools for you

Dear White America
We forgive you for beating a black boy
name Emmit Till to death for
whistling at a white woman

Dear White America
we forgive you for turning your backs
on many innocent black convicts in jail

Dear White America
We the black people forgive you
But it's not Forgotten




Submitted on 2005-11-22 14:55:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This maybe more about the disscussion produced by the poem, than the poem it self. But looking at Corparate slavery as eluded to by inspirt, one can best look to the conquer Napoloen who said, A man will fight long and hard for a tiny bit of ribbon. Or something to that point. The current state of America is not so much slavery as it is a confinement of evident choices. People today in America sell themselves as a product, as a skill much like craftsmen and leaders from years before. But once inside people lose the ablity to break free, due to responsiblities gained from the freedoms of their corparate employment. But you can't burned the bush because there is a single sour berry. Their are many corparations that work to better the lifes of their workers and consumers. I digress, pointing to the tradgeys of the irish canal, mine, etc... the japanese internees, the indian's trails of tears,(at least they had a chance to resist-cite tecumsa(spling?) and his prophet brother), and many others. Just realize that your troubles are nothing compared to your ancestors and theirs are nothing to yours. The world changes we have our own trials and tribulations, more mental than muscle it seems.But one truth is evident. If you wish to defeat your demon's this "white america", which no offense I never have seen the world's melting pot as one race, you must rise in actions not only in words. The poem was straight forword and it stayed on topic, even if i have not, I like the historical refernce. THough it is said History is written by the victor, you have prove that a lie. I like it. thanks for your comment on Jimmy:)
| Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Aruemos | [ Reply to This ]
  ouch. it seems that "white america" isn't taking it so well. it's good and i understand what ur coming from. nowadays racism isn't everywhere like it used to be but u can still find it if u look for it. a lotta whites think they're better than other races but i wouldn't exactly call that racism. it's just like a minor prejudice. i think bush is racist cuz i know DAMN WELL that if katrina would have hit a predominately white area the government aid would've been rushing to help us. but maybe it's our fault too becuz niggas is crazy. like kanye said "racisms still alive. they just be concealing it". i liked the last stanza the most
| Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  I believe it might be offensive to whites. you see what happened in the past generations ago with slavery has nothing to do with those who are here today. I have never understood why African Americans dwell on hatred of a generation long since past. many generations have passed since the days of slavery. the piece especially saying “white America” only makes it sound like militant rhetoric. instead elaborate on the slavery itself for it does exist today in other countries. try using what is already inside you that spark to make a meaningful write with a great social impact.

important note: i am talking about a separate write i do not intend for you to alter this one at all.

this is a challenge not a nagging, I do hope that you do not see it as that. what I am saying here is we have much worse things going on today to deal with, people being held in Cuba without the benefit of a lawyer. there are countries that have hired scientists trying to find genes to patent so corporations can own intellectual property rights. basically they own that species of plant or animal. there is so much going on in this world now. now if you want to do a historical piece that is great. take me to the days of slavery and make me feel the sadness and the hopelessness of what it is like to be in the shoes of someone in the shackles of slavery. that I say would be great writing skills and I would commend you for it, as I’m sure others would.

my problem mostly is lumping an entire race. now I do understand that it is in reference to the establishment is not so much the race in its entirety. still it is offensive only because of the label "white america" you want to point out a person that is fine or an entity that too is great. anyhow you’ll make a excellent piece I’m sure,

~mike
| Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with Epiphany, african tribes sold other africans to white men, but thats neither here nor there. Also, look at africa today, how many black people do you know of who would like to live there now? But that doesnt matter, overall, i like this piece, question and answer poems are very unique and give you alot of room to be creative. Other than the very sensitive and opinionated topic choice, you did a good job.


~Kane~
| Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
  I, personally, don't believe that it's proactive or positive to address this to "White America" - slavery was also initiated and encouraged by tribes - selling their own and others to the whites - what we as people should focus on is the historical slander against human beings and life in general.
I, in no way, condone what happened but as is still apparent in American and other societies is the lack of education and cultural appreciation and the lack of humanity.
I applaud your efforts and if it wasn't about "races" but about people the world would be a better place.
Love,Peace,Joy! tif
| Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  overall a good piece. well written. of course im always semi-aggravated when i hear about black appreciation month because there is a severe lack of native american appreciation. ha thats what we have thanksgiving for. to celebrate the disease, the killing, the lying, and of course the unfair stealing of their land and acting like settler were in any way superior to them. and then theres all the other people who were done wrong. slavery is a huge deal, and very wrong but it wasnt the only huge deal. irish people, japanese people, mexican people, etc etc etc. funny how we never hear much about their tragedies in school and yet we spend more than our share of time on slavery. not trying to rant but it bothers me very very badly.
| Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by namesdontmatter | [ Reply to This ]
  I am white, and I thought it was good. I really agree with the ideas. I especially liked the reference to Emmett Till. If you haven't, you should read Bob Dylan's song about Emmett Till.

I'm not completely sold on the ending, but I don't know what I would change about it.
| Posted on 2006-04-17 00:00:00 | by Dylan fan | [ Reply to This ]


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