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    dots Submission Name: why am i callingdots
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    Author: namesdontmatter
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/89/29
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotswhy am i callingdots
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    in my broken voice i choke out hello
    and i know you know
    i didnt think youd answer the phone
    after all you never did before
    it would ring and ring and ring
    and i know you sat listening to afraid to hear what i had to say
    maybe you were right and i shouldve shut up
    but you know me better than that
    have i ever stopped talking before i was done
    without being rudely interrupted
    why do i even want to talk to you now
    im done, i said my piece
    you sat there and took it silently
    bravo for your grand performance
    acting as though you were even a little sorry
    i know youre not
    so again i ask myself
    why was i even calling
    subconsciously did i want you to pick up
    and hear the sorrow in my voice




    Submitted on 2005-11-22 15:09:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Another one that pertains to me and my ex...exqusitly done. I love the images, the words flow amazingly well, the subject is one i'm familiar with and heartfeltly connect with, and as always it is completely original.
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmmmmmm it sounds like love lost. LIke you've just called your ex and tried to explain...that's what i did. I know sorry but i was in love with him. Anyways this was good..you could also view this in a way of a crush. Many ways to view poetry like many ways to view a poem. That was my outlook on it. I liked it.

    ~~Danni~~
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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