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    dots Submission Name: Through My Windowdots
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    Author: oixi
    ASL Info:    50/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 196/242/97
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Description:
       A little poem I wrote while looking out of my window. Let me know what you think.


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    dotsThrough My Windowdots
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    Through the glass I can see
    greens and reds, and sunlight spent.
    Colors mixed so playfully,
    surely nature must this have meant.

    To see the world as canvas painted,
    beyond the polished surface clear.
    Not by imitation tainted,
    but beauty born by basic sphere.

    Mother Nature displays before me,
    vixenish, and without shame.
    Joyous fauna and splendorous tree,
    divided by my window pain.

    Then this allure is all but halted
    in the shimmering light of day.
    By houses and roadways salted
    with pavements reeking manmade gray.

    It saddens me to behold
    resplendence contrasted thus.
    Nature’s freshness, now grown old
    like shiny metal caught by rust.




    Submitted on 2005-11-22 15:29:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Great job! You really have a gift with flowing bigger words together to make a beautiful poem. I love the feel and meaning of this, keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem. I feel exactly the same way when I look out my window and see the glorious oak trees outside my building: then my eye goes to that nasty old road. Love the pun with "pain". I also love that you described Mother Nature as "vixonish". What a wonderful word to use! I've always seen Nature as playful as well - coy even. Thanks so much for this poem!
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by JAvery | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem flows nice and has a pleasant tone.
    I really like your word use too.
    Me, living in wyoming can easily get the picture you are trying to display
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Jussy | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really well done and it had an ease about it - I loved the message and living in the foothills of northern California I, too, have seen what the manmade gray is - urban encroachment!
    Visual and making a statement - I like it! Love,Peace,Joy ~ Know,Experience,Be! tif
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]



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