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    dots Submission Name: The Naked Treedots
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    Author: xmangaXfreakx
    ASL Info:    13/f/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 31/30/22
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 950
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       I wrote this on the bus today. It seems silly, but think about it. ok? bye!


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    dotsThe Naked Treedots
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    I feel bad for that tree.
    It must be embarassed,
    being all naked like that.

    I bet the pine trees laugh,
    but I wish they'd be nude JUST ONCE.
    Then they'd know what it feels like
    to be
    "THE NAKED TREE"

    The maple knows what it's like being
    "THE NAKED TREE",
    So it doesn't talk behind the other tree's trunk.

    Soon, though, the pine tree
    will be the odd one out,
    because everyone else will be
    streaking in the snow.

    So there, pine trees.




    Submitted on 2005-11-22 16:19:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aw, I really like this one. As previously stated *points at other comment* I liked it's simplicity, and also how it can be taken in a deeper way, like the feeling of being alone, "the odd one out."
    Ok, so I'm not a good critiquer, but I really really like it!
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by Saphyra | [ Reply to This ]
      This was sincere and simple and original - it reminds me of when I just step back and look at things in a simpler way.

    It can also be much deeper in its simplicity - nakedness in being and relationship - jealousy, etc.

    Good on you!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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