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    dots Submission Name: Slaves of Blissful ignorancedots
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    Author: Jussy
    ASL Info:    21 ...guy....waterworld
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 66/64/21
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    Bytes: 434



    Description:
       This is about government today. No matter how pleasing the honey looks, there is deceit behind it.


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    dotsSlaves of Blissful ignorancedots
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    Here he is descending down
    towards our earth,
    let us look and smile and question.
    We can be his worker bees
    if only at one price,
    Let us sacrifice all we are
    so we can be acknowledged for our blindness.
    Carrying orders, injected with pep in his
    assembly lines.
    All for one, and one be
    sole proprietor over man.
    Come friend, let us sew
    for our master.




    Submitted on 2005-11-22 16:43:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was defintaly interesting...I usually enjoy free-verse when it has an obvious point and isn't too-spontanious. This made me think of alot of the writes I have about the government...one thing comes to my mind...were you talking about any particular president/leader or were you referring to bush? cause either would work for my opinion of government...we shouldn't let laws decide what our morales are and who are trust lies with. great write. thnx for posting it.
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Now I haven't read any of this yet, but I have read the title, and I know for sure that it will be awesome from the title, so here we go, I'm gonna read it now...

    ...and yes, it was awesome, me and you have much in common, I have a song much like this, but it's more about religious propaganda than the government, but it just really reveals the governments ties with it, and it will eventually be posted, and you should check it out when it comes out
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an interesting poem, but it didn't seem to have a point to me, but I'm sure you'll get better in time. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      This is original in its presentation and I, too, liked the free verse - this reminded me of a scene from Floyd's The Wall - the mundane, automoton life factory - always doing for someone else.
    Great!
    Welcome to Elite!
    Love,Peace,Joy ~ Know,Experience,BE! tif
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I am not a big fan of free verse, but I found this work interesting. It made me wonder, which is certainly a good result of poetry.

    let us look and smile and question.

    Says it all for me. Good write ... thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]


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