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    dots Submission Name: Tormented desiredots
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    Author: Di Re Rakord
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 130/125/30
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTormented desiredots
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    Cutting searing deeper fearing
    What is going on?
    Blood is pouring no ones mourning
    Iíve truly been forgotten

    Crying tearing calmly glaring
    Why is it your gone?
    More and more crimson galore
    Youíve left me for the last time

    Killing dying malice shining
    Animosity taking over
    You lied to me you died to me
    Hatred lasts forever

    Murder slowly almost holy
    Sapphire eyes flaring
    I loved you I cared for you
    And you cast me unto hell

    Tears fall bodies raw
    You thought I would stay?
    Family ties that no one abides
    Words can be pure evil

    Blood seeps purity reeks
    Heís lying just the same
    Scarlet is shed right under the head
    How lively is he now?




    Submitted on 2005-11-22 19:01:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Incredible, i love the speed and rhythm of this, its like a quick flow of thoughts. "Cast me unto hell" is a fantastic line, i am defibnitly going to look into your other writings.


    ~Kane~
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is a great poem i'm going to add it to my favourites, its unique in a way and i thought i could relate to it really well...it was also a good length and didn't have any *boring* bits in it...wonderful
    ++My Pain++
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by my pain | [ Reply to This ]


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