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    dots Submission Name: Sweetheartdots
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    Author: emo-tastic
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 571/566/128
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       First attempt at a sonnet.


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    dotsSweetheartdots
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    Sweetheart, we breathe each other
    while the melancholy organist
    plays his monody (reminiscent
    of some forgotten tryst)
    keeping time for a tragedy
    not easily passed through
    nevertheless I still donít
    understand myself nor you
    though, bless your soul,
    you try to create a paean
    but the dread, like some Poe horror story
    builds for eons
    and so we breathe one anotherís scent
    until the day ends and we both are spent.




    Submitted on 2005-11-22 21:26:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this is very sensual and very sweet.
    how did you think of it?

    these two lines brought a lot of emotion in me:

    and so we breathe one anotherís scent
    until the day ends and we both are spent

    now that's an imagination. wonderfully written.
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]


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