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Lust, my love...


Author: thesacredone
ASL Info:    18/F/BK
Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 139 /159 /50
Words: 143
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Lust, my love...



You’ve got that smile on your face,
And the look in your eyes says it all.
Do you see me here open for you?
Are you ready to watch me fall?
If you want me to, I’ll do it, babe,
Dirty, down, and low I’ll be
For the sake of lust and love,
Will you take time to fuck me?
Used and abused, I am, but still,
I’m untainted. I’ll perplex
You into thinking that all you need
Is me with a little sex.
I can’t help it that I want you
Its hard to tell you no
So today’s a little different,
How far would you like to go?
Do you see me here open for you?
Are you ready to watch me fall?
You’ve got that smile on your face,
And the look in your eyes says it all.




Submitted on 2005-11-23 00:01:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ...ok, 15 year old in love and wanting sex. Whatever floats your boat. This is a nicely done poem that shows the frustrating nature of love, especially love that is not returned. Rhyme scheme is correct, but it doesnt stand out very much, maybe you could do something to that, but other than that its all good.


~Kane~
| Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem makes me at the same time sad and angry. Sad at the seeming sense of futility in the emotions and love that is never returned. Angry at the conveyed sense of injustice and unappreciation that it seems is present in the situation. All told a very well written piece and quite emotionally stimulating as well. it allows for a catharsis of sorts to occur in a slightly non-conventional manner of achieving it. very nicely done, and thank you for sharing!
| Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]


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