wow, I hate the sadness that creeps from every stanza. very powerful indeed. The feeling of missing a person so much that your heart aches, no pain can measure. You really brought that out. the emotions really rose from the words you used, the pictures you painted where perfect to put me there.
you covered a very large area of feelings, yet narrowed it down to the simple fact that it hurt. its killing you.
you took me on a very emotional ride. take care ~jennifer
Extremely Powerful! This write was screaming Emotion I too hope you do not feel that death is the answer For you are much to strong and gifted of a person to let negativity bring you down Remain Positive!
And Thank You for your recent comments I am glad you felt the emotion I was trying to let others feel with that write Thank You Ron
Wow! This is really sad. This sounds to me like someone who is so frustrated with life and has been badly hurt by someone to the point where they feel they just cant take it anymore. It definitely conveys some deep emotion and the depression is felt with these words. The last stanza here is particularly powerful and I found the ending to be bluntfully shocking. "Come spit on my grave" is such a resentful and painful line that carries such an impact to the ending of this poem. It conveys extreme pain and hurt felt and is telling this person to come and kick them one more time by spitting on the grave. Very well written and expressed. Take care.
Wow... I really like this piece, dawg. I hope you don't feel like this fa'real, man. But wow, your words were powerful, man. I loved the metaphors you used for 'departing' like the train, and the plane... Mad hot, fa'real.