this shows alot of emotion for a short poem, i think you should try to make it a little longer if you want to, i mean its really good the way it is, but i think you can really go into depth with it. other than that, you did a really good job =]
Its not bad...short. I prefer to read poems of more detail and more of a story...something that captures the reader a bit longer. The flow and rhyming scheme were very good..and the title fit the body. Overall it was fair. Keep writing and try to find some more emotion of passion in it.