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Author: Star
ASL Info:    15 F WI
Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125 /127 /42
Words: 35
Class/Type: Misc /Depressed
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Hey lissa sry i wanted u to read this, luv ya


here i sit all alone
fear of the uknown
upon the wall i pound my fists
no longer wanting to exist
wanting them to feel and see
wat theyve truly done to me

Submitted on 2005-11-23 10:23:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i can relate to this poem because when i was in school i was virtually invisible to everyone except my close friends. i really like it, keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this poem because I feel that exact same way when it comes to everyone around me. I feel as though they don't see me or see how they make me feel. This is a great poem and means a lot to me.
| Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
  this shows alot of emotion for a short poem, i think you should try to make it a little longer if you want to, i mean its really good the way it is, but i think you can really go into depth with it.
other than that, you did a really good job =]
| Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by heather_ | [ Reply to This ]
  Its not bad...short. I prefer to read poems of more detail and more of a story...something that captures the reader a bit longer. The flow and rhyming scheme were very good..and the title fit the body. Overall it was fair. Keep writing and try to find some more emotion of passion in it.
| Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by angeleyes116692 | [ Reply to This ]
  Awesome poem, I can relate to the words. It caught my attention. Keep up the good work.It has nice wording and a goo low to it.
| Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by TwinkleToes | [ Reply to This ]

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