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    dots Submission Name: Today...they die.dots
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    Author: Metal Heart74
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 72/61/17
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Description:
       their are suicide bombers almost every day, i always try to imagine a bomber's state of mind before he blows himself up. i try to imagine that but i just end up with nothing, it gave me a good idea for a poem. No political views, just thoughts and suggestions


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    dotsToday...they die.dots
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    His hands sweaty and trembling
    as his shirt he is slowly assembling
    upon his chest breathing, heaving, letting out his cry.
    Today...
    today they die.
    Invaded witout a cause
    a people whose motive flawed
    killing people innocent
    providing a governing adjustment
    Belief in the cause
    makes him pause
    and pray
    for today...
    today they die.
    The day is bright
    and hot,
    he finds himself in
    the perfect spot
    He is sweating profusely, he cannot think
    his eyes wide open he will not blink
    for the last minute of his life will not be spent
    not knowing what happened then.
    There are people everywhere, unaware
    he just stares.
    Again he prays
    his feeling slips away,
    he is no longer a human with a life
    but a person with a job.
    He finishes praying
    and feels the trigger
    Toady...the people around
    will meet their end
    in a torrent of fire for today
    Today they die.




    Submitted on 2005-11-23 14:28:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with Kane. This was very original, and I think it's great that you drew this from something very real that is happening. Personally, it wasn't one of my favorites, but I def. respect this piece and you for writing it. Good job.

    Stefanie
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by DeadValentine | [ Reply to This ]
      Great job! This is a very original piece that has a great rhyme scheme and a great idea. This is just so amazing, the way you weave allusion to todays situation without really taking a side, i love it.

    ~Kane~
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]


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